So I fell in love...
And there's no one to catch me.
So I listen for a sound... And it's empty.
And I fall to the ground...
If you're gonna fall in love...
Do this for me;
and if you're gonna dream...
Don't ever leave.
And if you're gonna kiss me on the lips,
there's one more thing I wish you could do
Hold onto me.
Don't ever leave.
Please just stay,
and never go away!
I need someone to hold me.
And that someone ain't there,
I know you can't see me...
I'm as invisible as air
I can promise you.
If you can promise me;
we can pretend like a family.
And if I say I love you...
You know that its true.
I will be there for you.
If you're gonna fall in love...
Do this for me;
and if you're gonna dream...
Don't ever leave.
And if you're gonna kiss me on the lips,
there's one more thing I wish you could do
Hold onto me.
Don't ever leave.
Please just stay,
and never go away!
So I fell in love...
And there's no one to catch me.
So I listen for a sound... And it's empty.
And I fall to the ground...
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I love this! So smooth and good! XD I really like it! Keep writing! Can't wait to read more.
I loved this. It was very good.
"If you're gonna fall in love...
Do this for me;
and if you're gonna dream...
Don't ever leave.
And if you're gonna kiss me on the lips,
there's one more thing I wish you could do
Hold onto me.
Don't ever leave.
Please just stay,
and never go away!
So I fell in love...
And there's no one to catch me.
So I listen for a sound... And it's empty.
And I fall to the ground..."
I love that part. Awesome job
I need someone to hold me.
And that someone ain't there,
(I think you should use "isn't" instead of ain't."
ain't just kinda ruins the flow)
Other then that i rather liked it.
Oh and person above me, this is a song, not a poem, thus the reason its under the Lyrics section. Not being harsh, i think you meant to say song.
Interesting song (*coughs* yes, I meant song. <.< Thanks, Mortality). How it's divided up is just a bit awkward, but I think it was good. Even if it wasn't, there's something distracting about it that would make you forget.
...that's not a bad thing.
I love this part:
"I need someone to hold me.
And that someone ain't there,
I know you can't see me...
I'm as invisible as air"